Yep, another one for Jim Bower's many projects. This one's for Project #10, with the theme of Weather. The next project's already under way, and another one about to start. So much writing, so little time... gah. This one's short too, but we'll see about the next few. I have BAAAAAADDDD feelings about project 12...
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The rain continued to pour down around the awning as I looked out into
the darkened city streets. It seemed that everywhere you looked,
you saw the same thing; people exactly like me, pissed off and
disgruntled, shivering and hovering underneath whatever shelter they
could afford while waiting for this damned rain to slow enough to make
it over to the next marginal cover along the route to his or her
miserable domicile.
It had been like this for weeks now, with only the occasional break of
sunlight to cast any light onto these soggy city roads. Everyone
was tired of leaky basements, of water dripping onto their heads, and
moisture invading every aspect of their lives. People had already
begun the process of moving out and heading for drier skies; whether
they were ever successful, I cared not.
I was going to be late again. I knew I’d get yelled at, and still
I didn’t care. I’d found this awning fair and square, and until
it let up enough to satisfy me, I wasn’t budging one inch into this
damned rain. It was cold, too. Yeah, staying here would be
for the best, or at least that’s what I tried to convince myself.
I knew that, come payday, I’d be bitching about the lack of hours, but
that wasn’t for a few days still…
A flash of color caught my attention from a passing car, but it had
only been the headlights reflecting off of a soda can. Nothing
around here retained any color anymore; it had all drowned in this
damned rain. The car passed, and the color remained, finally
catching my full attention.
The color was bright, vibrant, and it glowed with an almost neon
phosphorus intensity. Only the lights of the city bars were
brighter, which was impressive in and amongst itself. I thought
for a moment that perhaps some child had forgotten a flashlight, until
the light moved and hovered in the air.
I watched, stunned, as the light made a very random pattern as it moved
through the air. Aimlessly, it finally fluttered almost
accidentally into the awning where I stood in amazement and stopped,
gasping for breath.
Fearful yet with a touch of curiosity, I examined the light closely and
was startled to see a tiny person in the center of the light. The
lad was fully formed, and rather muscular for a creature only a few
inches high. I realized with a start that the light actually
projected from the tiny thing, and not from any device that the little
guy was carrying.
It took me another few seconds to realize that the man had miniscule
wings attached to his back, threadbare things that looked no thicker
than the width of a fingernail in size. They were completely
clear, and since the man; no, fairy, I corrected myself; and since the
fairy was moving them still, it was hard to discern any further details
on the wings.
The fairy waited there with me in that awning for fifteen minutes, as
happy to be out of the rain as I was. I simply stared at him in
awe, my own earthly concerns and troubles completely forgotten by the
appearance of this… this creature. Finally, with a musical chirp
of satisfaction, the fairy took to the air again and headed back into
the rain, flying up and over one of the buildings in his own quest to
return to his home.
I must have stood there for an hour, contemplating what I’d just
seen. Then, with only the briefest of hesitation, I pulled the
hood off of the top of my head and stepped out into the pouring
rain. I began to whistle, an offbeat tune I suddenly remembered
from my youth, long forgotten until now.
The rain was cold, but it served to awaken me further as I strolled
along those beautiful city streets. It was going to be a good
day, indeed.
| Date | Name | Comment | | | 16 Jul 2005 | D Joelle Duran | Loading...Short and sweet, Matt! Both of which are appreciated. I quite liked how that little encounter wholly changed his perspective. And you asked for it with project #12, laddie.  The square root of negative one indeed! Matthew T. Summers replies: "Oh, I'm waiting to see what I get assigned to with bated breath. I *HAD* to call him on that one, you know that!!! hehee... Glad you liked this one. >Matt" | |
| 16 Jul 2005 | B. Layne Weaver | Loading...*does first comment salsa* "They were completely clear, and since the man; no, fairy, I corrected myself; and since the fairy was moving them still, it was hard to discern any further details on the wings." I'm not saying for sure this is ;incorrectt; because I don't know for sure. I just have never seen semicolons used in this manner before. Usually to set apart a little snippet like that, emdashes are used: "...since the man--no, fairy, I corrected myself--since the fairy..." Like I said, I'm not saying it's wrong... just different from what I'm accustomed to. Well, that un-nit was the only thing I found to semi-pick at. ^_~ This was very well-written, full of nice detail. It's amazing how one's perspective's can change their mood, isn't it? A nice tale! *leaves a plate of blackberry waffles* Matthew T. Summers replies: "WAFFLES!!! {Dives into them with a snarl} Glad you liked it, it was actually hard for me to come up with a concept to fit that one. Weather? Gah.. but I think it worked. >Matt" | |
| 3 Aug 2005 | Tim Woodard | Loading...Yay! Omg, my poxy is whatever holding me back let me comment! Woohoo! Err, sorry, darn coffee again is getting to me, but hey! Loved the story, makes me alittle happier today too ^^. Although I think the rain is very beautiful indeed, but whatever. Love the story! Keep up the awesome work -Tim (Yes, I know flattery will get me no where, thats why I put honestly what I thought ^^) Matthew T. Summers replies: "Glad you liked it! " | |
| 10 Apr 2006 | L. Shanra Kuepers | Loading...The color was bright, vibrant, <- I think it'd be clear from the context if you replace 'the color' with 'It'. Avoids repetition. the light actually projected from the tiny thing <- light light light light light light light (light?). Think you might want to change a few of them. Even for an emulation of speech patterns, this paragraph and the previous two are a little over the top with the 'the light' repetition. Might also want to consider adding 'itself' to put more emphasis on the thing, but that's just a stylistic suggestion. the man; no, fairy, I corrected myself; <- dashes, not semi-colons. You can't ever put a sentence in between semi-colons. They just equal clauses, they don't insert unrelated ones. That's for dashes (like in your case) or brackets of a kind. Awwww.... That's a lovely ending. Very different from the other fairy encounter piece you have. This was really, really sweet. I loved to see his perspective change because of that one encounter. ^-^ Lovely detail in this, lovely characterisation. You have a knack for capturing personalities in a tiny piece of text. ^-^ Wonderful little tale! Matthew T. Summers replies: "hehe, glad you liked! I was in a pretty good mood for this one, and I guess it shows. >Matt" | |
| 22 May 2006 | Alexandru Moisi | Loading...Loved it! Reminded me of Vancouver, WA(where I am for the year) Really nice, no explanation, just stuff like this happenes. Great. Reminded me also of Kafka's stories only a lot more optimistic, nice. Keep up the good work Matthew T. Summers replies: "Glad you liked it. I'd like to have that happen to me, honestly... >Matt" | |
| 14 Aug 2008 | CJ O´Shea | Loading...It is a rare gift indeed to convey so much with brevity. Hearos know it’s not a skill that I possess, much to my sorrow. I cannot express with any kind of justice how much I love this very simple, and yet completely wonderful, tale. It is like the fairy himself, a bright little light in the gray of so much else. I truly wonderful piece, and appreciated in the highest. | |
| 2 Feb 2009 | Anya Dolgopolova | Loading...Can i just say how AWESOME ur writing is??? like it really rox! its funny and evil all at the same time! im an aspiring writer myself...(ohmigod this sounds so cliche&rsquo  any tips? | |
| 14 Jun 2010 | Heather M Sellers | Loading...I absolutely adore this one, I love stories with just a touch of magic to them  | |
| 17 Apr 2011 | Anon. | Loading...It was cute i liked it
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