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Matthew T. Summers

"BiFrost - Twisted Self-Portrait" by Matthew T. Summers

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Done for BiFrost's current competition. I was to do a twisted self-portrait, making myself into something completely different. I'd considered fantasy, but ended up settling on sci-fi, just because it seemed to fit the story better.
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The man in the picture stared blankly back at me as I examined it carefully.  I knew the man in the picture, of course… how could one forget his original life, his own visage from eons ago?  Even if it had been over six thousand years and two genetic wars prior… I shook my head, still astounded that the picture even EXISTED, much less that it had survived the war-torn desolation that was now the planet Earth(Prime).

 

I studied the picture again, curiosity compelling me to delve into it further.  The picture showed me as I had been in 2004.  Brown hair and eyes, eyes that sparkled with more stories than I’d ever had time to write.  A bit of a double chin inherited from parents long forgotten, and laughter lines showed how easily the man in the picture laughed.  The damned stubble on my face that I fought to this day was still present in the picture, bringing a very rare smirk to my face.

 

How very, very long ago that had been.  I released my grip on the picture, allowing it to settle with a slim flutter to the ground of the wreckage I stood in.  This… this had been my residence, my home at the time that picture was taken.  Memories began to flood my circuitry then, memories I’d thought I’d long since suppressed.

 

She’d stood right there, against the spot where a wall had been standing, making jokes in an attempt to make me laugh before she took the picture.  I could hear her laughter now, on the edges of my consciousness… and I could almost smell the familiar smell of the soap and shampoo she always used.  My wife… the love of my life.  Oh god, that was so long ago… 

 

She’d been as tall as I, brown hair past her shoulders and eyes that changed colors depending on her mood.  Given that she was usually mad at me for my ornery streak, her eyes were usually green… though they turned blue when love was in the air.  Her face was nearly perfect, her skin so smooth… I shook my head to clear that memory before I got too wistful.

 

And… and my son…  a carbon copy of me except for his mother’s eyes, he’d been so full of spunk and life.  My world had revolved around the two, and in his slim three years of life, he’d taught me so much that I never thought I’d have had to learn.

 

My gaze went to the one remaining wall of the ruins, and my eyes landed on a cracked and brittle mirror that had somehow survived the years.  A horrible monstrosity stared back at me, an android pieced together from the losers of this war.  The creature wasn’t even humanoid, as a spider-like body afforded quicker movements and more surface area upon which to install more instruments of war. 

 

The head of the creature, the head of the metallic beast of war… my head, stared at the twisted reflection that showed the true cost of the war.  Humanity had been destroyed, with only slim and useless attempts at retaining the soul of humanity enshrined within metallic bodies of war. 

 

The mandibles of the robotic spider clicked together, the sound grating in the silence of the tomb I stood in.  I felt a wave of sadness cross my thoughts, the only human part of me left alive in this damned shell.  For the longest of moments, I stared at my reflection… until the Motherhood sent its next signal.

 

The enemy had been sighted, not six hundred land miles from my position.  It was time to return to the war.  Thoughts and memories were immediately forgotten as I shifted into war mode, twin lasers emerging from my shell as I scuttled quickly through the wall, bringing down the rest of the ruins around me.

 

War was life, and memories were better off dead.  It was now time to fight… it was the only life I knew now.

←- Specimen 121.1 | When Mythical Creatures Meet -→

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13 Jun 2004:-) Brian L. Husted
This is a wonderful little story. You really do a great job of painting an image with your words. It is so cool to have some really talented writers in Bifrost now. I’m going to make it a point to come back and read more of your work.

:-) Matthew T. Summers replies: "Thanks! I'm looking forward to it myself. And these stories will be here when you return. 2 >Matt"
7 Jul 2004:-) S. J. Edwards
Wow, quite a twist. That was pretty unexpected, gave me a bit of a shiver down my spine (although that could just be my fear of spiders!) I love sci-fi so I'm biased, but I thought this was great. Such a good idea to use a story as your self portrait, it was pretty moving too.

1 Matthew T. Summers replies: "  lol.. well, I don't really have much choice but to use a story as my self-portrait, because I have the drawing abilities of a dead newt. 12 hehee... glad you liked it though. I wasn't sure on the spider, but it's been well received, so I think I did decently on my choice on this. 12 >Matt"
17 Jul 2004:-) Anna M. Mortensen
*jaw drops*
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*picks it back up off the floor* I see you have high hopes for humanity. Very nice.

The style is right up my ally, so I'm really fond of this piece. *wipes eye* <- That is called 2a.m./I haven't slept in 30 hours instability. I will return later and give a worthy comment.

1 Matthew T. Summers replies: "lol.. glad you liked it. 12 Hope you got some sleep last night.. I know myself what it's like to live on insomnia. hehee.. >Matt"
30 Jul 2004:-) Kehrli
Interesting and dark! (Which is always good!)

I have to nitpick, though, it's in my nature. I think you overuse the word "slim". The first time you use it - "I released my grip on the picture, allowing it to settle with a slim flutter to the ground of the wreckage I stood in." - it jarred at me, so I was watching out for it the next few times you used it.

I do the same thing when I describe hallways as, say, "thin" instead of narrow, and stuff. I don't know what you should use instead of "slim" though in the first one. Maybe "bare"? Oig. Idioms. Gotta love 'em.

:-) Matthew T. Summers replies: "I have a very, very bad habit of repeating words, which I sometimes catch in edits. This wasn't edited, so... there you go. 2 hehee... glad you liked it! {makes mental note.. to have Keffy visit, write DARK stuff... and keep garlic handy, just in case...} >Matt"
26 Aug 2004:-) Alice Muffin Girl Smith
~ ...and *laughter* lines showed how easily the man in the picture *laughed*. < You've got a repetition goin' on there. Might you consider a small re-write to ditch the first? I think the phrasing might have a funner ring to it if you let the reader draw the laugh line connection themselves. ^_^
~ ...and I could almost *smell* the familiar *smell* of the soap and shampoo she always used. < Do we really need the repetition of "smell"?
~ ...he'd taught me so much that I never thought *I'd* have *had* to learn. < Do we need that second "had"?
~ ...as a spider-like body afforded quicker movements and *more* surface area upon which to install *more* instruments of war. < All right, now I'm sure: you're just doin' the repetition thing to bug me. *shakes fist in your general direction* ^_~
~ It was *now* time to fight… it was the only life I knew *now*. < Don't make me shake my fist again... I've got my eye on you...

Kinda depressing, but surprisingly human despite its claims to the otherwise... In other words: nice one, Matt. ^_^ How'd you do in the contest?

:-) Matthew T. Summers replies: "Repetition? I don't know what you mean by repetition. It's not repeating like I'm repeating repeating words just to repeating annoy you with their repetition.

meep.

Er, yeah. {cough} No idea how I did in the competition, honestly.. been too busy to look. Glad you liked it though! >Matt"
17 Jul 2005:-) Chris A Jackson
Jeez! How long has this been up and I haven't read it... I am so utterly remiss in my duties as an elfwooder.

*kicks himself*

This story gave me chills... though I think it's quite a technological leap for three years, I get it... this could very well be the road we are on...

Jeez I'm cheerful tonight...

:-) Matthew T. Summers replies: "Only a year as of June. *cough*. 14 Glad you liked it, though I honestly forgot it was even on my shelf. 2 >Matt"
10 Apr 200645 L. Shanra Kuepers
'kay, I know I've done it by pointing at this in other stories, but here I'm going to be a bit more general. Repetition. No one likes to be jerked out of a story and so far it feels like that happened every other sentence. You have a lovely turn of phrase and the idea is wonderful. I know your work and I know you can write it with less repetition. It'd make the story much better and much easier to get into.

Chilling. Absolutely chilling. Loved the twist there. You have a real talent for those. Loved the symbolism, loved the descriptions, loved how everything is wonderfully balanced. Loved the nostalgic feel of it and the shift as the war continued. Can you tell I loved a lot? This was beautiful. ^-^
31 Jul 2006:-) Taz Magpye
Have to say I didn't notice the repitition, it was the use of the word 'spunky' to describe his son that jarred me, but I think that is a cultural thing. It has a much more literal and less friendly meaning in the UK. Rarely used to mean sparky and full of life as you meant it here. Though it still conveys that meaning as well, I haven't heard a child referred to as 'Spunky' in a long time

I liked the thought that humanity is still contained in the android form, but fight against what I wonder" Or whom? Reminiscent of the opening scenes of Terminator, but from an interesting perspective. Like Terminator meets Robocop.

I haven't really tried to write Sci Fi, I sit more comfortably in a contemporart urban legend/horror genre. I suppose 'The Forsaken' comes the closest. But reading this makes me want to give it a try. Hmmm.. I'll have to consider it.

1 Matthew T. Summers replies: "heh, I write whatever's pounding in the back of my skull to be written. Sometimes it comes out fantasy, sometimes horror, sometimes sci-fi. I never really know until I'm getting into it... glad you liked it! 1 >Matt"
28 Dec 200645 Obsidian
now normally reading the stories on elfwood ISNT for me, they bore me! but this captivated me, the first sentence drew me in. its so sad, what a hollow life that would be. i love this, its brilliantly captivating, it drew me straight in. kudos!
2 Jul 2008:-) Kelsey M. Graham
Normally I don’t care for sci-fi all that much, but I loved this story! But so sad.... I wonder who they are fighting against, that humanity had to so twist themselves to survive. I wonder if it matters.
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'BiFrost - Twisted Self-Portrait':
 • Created by: :-) Matthew T. Summers
 • Copyright: ©Matthew T. Summers. All rights reserved!

 • Keywords: Apocalyptic, Portrait, Self, War
 • Categories: Fights, Duels, Battles, Robots, Androids, Humanoid Warmachines, Techno, Cyber, Technological, Urban Fantasy and/or Cyberpunk
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